Okay, people, I swear, after this, I will not bug you about it for the rest of the week. I will just let it stew and see what happens after my subconscious has been able to churn on it.
But I think I’ve been trying too hard.
What is my book about? It’s about a Methodist minister’s daughter who is turning into a flock of birds. That’s it.
The pitch? The sentence or two designed to make them want to read more? Something like:
When Hannah Sims learns she’s turning into a flock of birds, she expects to hear some explanation from God. After all, as a minister’s kid, Hannah grew up in a family that was regularly receiving and conveying messages from the Big Guy. This time, though, God is keeping His mouth shut. The Devil, however, is talking, and shopping at her same Walmart and dancing, awfully close, to Muddy Waters.
My only question is–Does that read like the Devil is dancing too close to Muddy Wa… Oh my god, I’m sorry. I just had to stare off into space for like five seconds imagining the Devil and Muddy Waters slow-dancing. Why did I not put a scene like that in the book?!